Topic: Logically develop your issue statement and pave your arguments to arrive at your proposal of a solution. @亚特兰大华人论坛:亚特兰大枫下论坛 The Rolia Forum of Atlanta

工作学习 / 外语学习 / Logically develop your issue statement and pave your arguments to arrive at your proposal of a solution. -goingconern(GoingConcern); 2012-12-13 {3555} (#7951828@0)

Good point! thanks!btw, what I posted yesterday was the 2nd paragraph from her homework...there were a lot more.....i was not surprised by her writing..all pre-teens write things like that....I was nicely surprised by her left-wing thinking..but guess that was natural for a girl at her age.... -mikesmith(老猫); 2012-12-13 {275} (#7951863@0)
请教一下，第二个major statement 的 animal 之前你没用定冠词，接下来第三句中的animal之前你用了the , 有什么讲究吗？另外，第五句里，A fur coats cost....笔误吧？A fur coat costs ..应当是你的原意吧？不是故意挑剔，只因你提到了zero spelling , grammar mistake -winterstorm(打酱油的); 2012-12-13 (#7952121@0)

Good question. The "animal" in the 2nd statement is a general reference and is in a plural form, thus I did not use an article beofre it. The following "animals" specifically refer to the "cats and dogs" that are abused, as afore-mentioned.Yes, a fur coat costs, not a fur coats cost. It is my typo. Could not revise once I had a reply. Tks for pointing it out. -goingconern(GoingConcern); 2012-12-13 {121} (#7952148@0)

Thanks. You could have avoided the typos easily. Good Writers edit :-) -thornthorn($oOHoly MolyOo$); 2012-12-13 (#7952150@0)

当我看到“pave”这个词，我觉得怎样有逻辑地推出结论是那样地形象。写的太好了。有时这种就一篇文章具体讲怎样改，对我有很实际的帮助，而且也说明了Edit的重要性。我渐渐地明白，就像功夫在诗外，写作真的是远远地高于文字的运用。收藏了，以后还会再看。多谢。 -nuanxin(nuanxin); 2012-12-13 (#7953028@0)
I normally don’t critique people’s casual writings, but I think this writing is quite serious and given your English level, it appears that you’ve written it in haste. Good points, just some minor inconsistencies. -nothanks(ciel); 2012-12-14 {1505} (#7953562@0)

Thanks for correcting:-). All makes sense except that "the" is not necessary before "reasons". -goingconern(GoingConcern); 2012-12-14 (#7953586@0)

I normally don't critique people's critiques, butA fur coats cost many lives of animals -> probably means "a fur coat", not "coats", "many animal lives" sounds more natural

Animal abuse is a big problem; there are reasons why human beings abuse the animals. -> "the animals", "the" sounds very strange -wincity(红卫兵); 2012-12-14 {265} (#7953595@0)

on 2nd thoughthuman beings abusing THE animals: THE is really wrong here, not just sounding strange -wincity(红卫兵); 2012-12-14 {85} (#7954034@0)

忽略语法，只谈逻辑。这个很重要。动物虐待得话题如果谈深刻点，要涉及到《论自由》和一些宗教的理念。论自由一书中明确表达过，少数民族，动物，虽然没有发言权和辩护权，但是他们一样有天赋的基本权利。 -linuxsun(ssss); 2012-12-14 {728} (#7954143@0)

Awesome perspective and great knowledge. I learned! Thanks! -goingconern(GoingConcern); 2012-12-14 (#7954261@0)

LOL, and I start to going concern about what is going on here -dv2011(小肥羊); 2012-12-14 (#7954363@0)

That has made his day and possibly year of the snake 2013. -thornthorn($oOHoly MolyOo$); 2012-12-14 (#7954372@0)

For a hunger of love like professor z, lol, everything counts -dv2011(小肥羊); 2012-12-14 (#7954452@0)

We all make grammatical errors and we all have accents, but those are something we have to live with, something we are trying to get rid of, not something we should feel proud of. -nothanks(ciel); 2012-12-17 {697} (#7957758@0)

BRAVO -thornthorn($oOHoly MolyOo$); 2012-12-17 (#7957805@0)
I agree with you that grammatical correctness is fundamental. However, I feel understanding a different perspective is also more important than jumping to your own interpretation. The bigger picture here is logical thinking in writing andI do think there is an element of truth in this perspective, should we all be open-minded enough. -goingconern(GoingConcern); 2012-12-17 {97} (#7958133@0)

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